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【入試に狙われる!】自由英作文「公的資金がオリンピック開催に使われるべきか?」模範解答&丁寧解説

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The Olympics Games will be held in Tokyo in 2020. The hosting of the games is expected to cost about 3 trillion yen. Some people approve of spending money hosting the Olympics. Others feel that this is a waste of public funds.
The question is: Should public funds be used to host the Olympics Games?
(80-100 words)

模範解答

私が書いたエッセイを見てみましょう

〖私が受験生ならこう書きます〗
I strongly believe that public funds should not be used to host the Olympic Games.
I understand that they are one of the biggest events that people around the world always look forward to and that so many athletes have been working so hard for them but we have other problems we need to put money into.For example, we experienced a huge tsunami in Tohoku in 2011 and there are still so many people who cannot even go back to their home.We should use public funds for those people in need.We can still make the games successful without using so much public funds. Hospitality is what's important.

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〖模範解答1〗

No, public funds should not be used to host the Olympic Games because the even is not highly important. There are many other issues, such as unemployment and health care that should be addressed first. The money that would have gone into building new stadiums and arenas can be used for things such as education and welfare. The public is becoming less and less interested in the Games. Therefore, they do not deserve public funds.

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〖模範解答2〗
Yes, public funds should be used to host the Olympic Games because it promotes the country and also brings in many tourists from all over the world. When people come to our country and spend money on accommodation, food and having fun, it is good for our economy. Holding the Olympics also encourages cultural interaction, and it makes the country more international.

ふりかえり

〖私の模範解答〗

【序論】
I strongly believe that public funds should not be used to host the Olympic Games.
「オリンピックを主催するために公的資金が使われるべきではないと強く思います

【本論】
I understand ①that they are one of the biggest events that people around the world always look forward to and ②that so many athletes have been working so hard for them 
「①世界中の人が楽しみにしている最も大きなイベントの一つであるということ、そして②多くのアスリートがオリンピックのために努力しているということは分かります」
but we have other problems we need to put money into.
「しかし、お金を使わなければいけない他の問題があります」
こういう風に反対意見に理解を示しておいて「でも!」と自分の意見を言うと説得力のある文章になります
※「~ということ」というthat節が2つあるときは2つ目のthatを書き忘れないように!
例:I think that S'V' and that S''V''

For example, we experienced a huge tsunami in Tohoku in 2011 and there are still so many people who cannot even go back to their home.
「例えば、私たちは2011年に東北で大きな津波を経験し、未だに我が家に帰ることのできない人たちがたくさんいます」

We should use public funds for those people in need.
「私たちは公的資金を助けを必要としている人々に使うべきです」

【結論】
We can still make the games successful without using so much public funds.
「公的資金をたくさん使わなくても大会を成功させることはできます」
Hospitality is what's important.
「お・も・て・な・しこそが大切なのです」
↑「・」は要らない?笑
※Hospitality is important.じゃインパクトが足りないので、関係代名詞whatを使って強調しました。(詳しくはここで解説しました)

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〖模範解答1〗

No, public funds should not be used to host the Olympic Games because the even is hot highly important.
There are many other issues, such as unemployment and health care that should be addressed first.
「失業や医療など、先に対処されるべき問題がたくさんあります」
※that should be addressed firstという関係代名詞の節がmany other issuesを説明しています。
※address【動】取り組む、扱う、処理する

The money that would have gone into building new stadiums and arenas can be used for things such as education and welfare.
「新しいスタジアムやアリーナを建てるために使われるはずのお金は、教育や福祉のために使われることができます」

The public is becoming less and less interested in the Games.
Therefore, they do not deserve public funds.
「よってオリンピックは公的資金を使うに値しません」

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〖模範解答2〗
簡単だったので省略!