元教員が分かりやすく教える英文法

ばか丁寧な高校英文法

TOIEC985点を取得した元高校教員が、使える例文を用いながら、苦手な人にも分かりやすく英文法を解説します。

自由英作文「テクノロジーは生活の質を落とす?」

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問題25f:id:chachachambo:20171130155655j:plain

次のことについて、150語程度の英語で答えなさい。

"Technology (computers.television, automobiles, mobile phone, and smartphones) creates more problems than it solves, and may threaten or damage the quality of life"
Do you agree or disagree? Give two or three reasons to support your opinion.

 

模範解答

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〖私が受験生ならこう書きます〗
I totally disagree with the idea that technology creates more problems than it solves.
First, technology has definitely improved the quality of lives in terms of communication. For example, thanks to the Internet, we can communicate with people anywhere on this planet. I personally have many friends living outside of Japan who I want to keep in touch with. Smartphones enable me to talk with them anytime and anywhere.
Secondly, technology allows us to travel overseas easily. Thanks to the technology of airplanes, we can travel much more easily than in the past. Even when we reserve a ticket, the Internet does help us a lot. When you want to get information about your destination, you can just look it up on the Internet. Even when you are at your destination, a translation app might help you communicate with people there.
We are never able to stop technology from advancing, so the important thing is that we learn to use it wisely without damaging the quality of life.
(168語)

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〖模範解答1〗
I feel that technology is destroying the way people live. Computers can do almost anything; so many people just sit at home alone in front of thier computer all day. They do not go out into the world to enjoy the natural beauty that the world offers. They do not go to libraries as often because they can find all the information they need on a computer.
I think that cell phones are the worst. Everyone has a mobile phone. Many people seem to talk on their phones wherever they are. This can be very dangerous when driving. Many car accidents happen because people are not paying close attention to the road. How can you watch the road when you are talking on a phone at the same time? Today,もうひとつ in many places it is illegal to talk on the phone while driving. I think this is a good idea. 
(149語)

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〖模範解答2〗
I think that technology is wonderful. It has allowed us to do so many things that we could not do in the past. Take planes, for example. Without the technology of airplanes, we would still have to use ships to cross the oceans. Imagin how long that might take. I went to Okinawa from Tokyo and it only took two hours. It was amazing.
Also, I would not be able to talk to my sister in Korea without a computer. I could talk to her on the telephone, but it would be very expensive. With a computer, I can chat with her online for as long as I like and it doesn't cost a single penny. Most importantly, some of the technology that exists today helps people live longer. Medical technology is very important and as it continues to improve, more people will live longer and healthier lives.
(148語)

ふりかえり

〖問題〗
「テクノロジー(パソコン、テレビ、自動車、携帯電話、スマホ)は、問題を解決するより問題を引き起こしており、私たちの生活の質を脅かしたりダメにしている」この意見に賛成か、反対か。2~3つの理由を述べなさい。

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〖私の模範解答〗
150語は結構多いので、個人的な話も含めてもいいかなと思い、自分の話も入れてみました。
【序論】
テクノロジーが問題を引き起こすという意見に反対!
【本論】
理由①コミュニケーションがしやすくなった←スマホの例
理由②海外旅行がしやすくなった←ネット予約、情報収集、翻訳アプリ
【結論】
賢くテクノロジーを使うすべを学ぶべきである

それでは詳しく見てみましょう。
使える表現に下線を引きます。
簡単な文は訳を省きます。

【序論】
I totally disagree with the idea that technology creates more problems than it solves.
「テクノロジーは問題を解決するよりも問題を引き起こすという考えに全くもって反対です」
【本論】
理由①:First, technology has definitely improved the quality of lives in terms of communication.
「まず第一に、テクノロジーはコミュニケーションの点から確実に私たちの生活の質を上げた」
※in terms of A「Aの点から」

For example, thanks to the Internet, we can communicate with people anywhere on this planet.
I personally have many friends living outside of Japan who I want to keep in touch with.
「私個人的には、海外に住む連絡を取りたい友達がたくさんいる」

Smartphones enable me to talk with them anytime and anywhere.
「スマートフォンのおかげで、いつでもどこでも彼らと話せる」
※enable O to+動詞の原形「Oが~するのを可能にする」→「SのおかげでOは~できる」無生物主語を解説したときに登場しました☟

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Secondly, technology allows us to travel overseas easily.
「2番目に、テクノロジーのおかげで私たちは海外に行きやすくなった」
allow O to+動詞の原形「Oが~するのを許す」→「SのおかげでOは~できる」
これも、無生物主語を解説したときに登場しました☟
enableと意味的には変わりませんが、前の文で既に使ったので重複を避けてallowを使いました。
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Thanks to the technology of airplanes, we can travel much more easily than in the past. Even when we reserve a ticket, the Internet does help us a lot.
「航空券を予約するときにも、インターネットは本当に役立ちます」
※does helpのdoesは強調です☟

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When you want to get information about your destination, you can just look it up on the Internet.
「目的地の情報が欲しければ、ネットで調べればいいのです」
Even when you are at your destination, a translation app might help you communicate with people there.
「目的に到着した時には、翻訳アプリが現地の人々とコミュニケーションをはかるのに役に立つかもしれません」
※help O 動詞の原形「Oが~するのを(直接的に)助ける」
※help O to+動詞の原形「Oが~するのを(間接的に)助ける」

We are never able to stop technology from advancing, so the important thing is that we learn to use it wisely without damaging the quality of life.
「我々はテクノロジーが発達するのを止めることはできない。だから大事なことは、我々が、生活の質をダメにすることなしに、それを賢く使うすべを学ぶことである」

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〖模範解答1:賛成バージョン〗
とても簡単な文章で書かれています。これくらいでいいんです!難しい文章を書かなくても、考えを頭の中で整理して、自分の使える表現を使って、正しい文法で書けば自由英作文も怖くありません!
I feel that technology is destroying the way people live. Computers can do almost anything; so many people just sit at home alone in front of thier computer all day. They do not go out into the world to enjoy the natural beauty that the world offers. They do not go to libraries as often because they can find all the information they need on a computer.
I think that cell phones are the worst. Everyone has a mobile phone. Many people seem to talk on their phones wherever they are.
This can be very dangerous when driving.
※"when driving"はもともと"when they are driving"でしたが、"they are"を省略しました

Many car accidents happen because people are not paying close attention to the road.
How can you watch the road when you are talking on a phone at the same time?
「電話しながら道路を見れるでしょうか?」
※こんな風に読者に問いかけるにすることで印象深い文章になります。

Today, in many places it is illegal to talk on the phone while driving.
※"while driving"はもともと"while they are driving"でしたが、"they are"を省略しました

I think this is a good idea. 

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〖模範解答2:反対バージョン〗
I think that technology is wonderful. It has allowed us to do so many things that we could not do in the past.
Take planes, for example.
「飛行機を例に挙げてみましょう」
Without the technology of airplanes, we would still have to use ships to cross the oceans.
「飛行機の技術がなければ、私たちは未だに海を渡るために船を使わなければならないだろう」
仮定法の文です(だから過去形のwouldが使ってある)

Imagin how long that might take.
「どれぐらいかかるだろうか想像してみてください」
※これも仮定法の文(だから過去形のmightが使ってある)

I went to Okinawa from Tokyo and it only took two hours. It was amazing.
Also, I would not be able to talk to my sister in Korea without a computer.
「コンピューターがなければ韓国にいる姉と話せないだろう」
※これも仮定法の文(だから過去形のmightが使ってある)

I could talk to her on the telephone, but it would be very expensive.
「電話でも話せるだろうが、とても高いだろう」
※これも仮定法の文(だから過去形のcould,wouldが使ってある)

With a computer, I can chat with her online for as long as I like and it doesn't cost a single penny.
※「たった1セントもかからない」→singleを使うことで強調している。
例:every single day「毎日毎日」→singleを使うことで強調している。

Most importantly, some of the technology that exists today helps people live longer. Medical technology is very important and as it continues to improve, more people will live longer and healthier lives.